You need to strengthen the idea of COHERENCE within your whole package. For example visual references; cultural references (representing Norwich and Britishness) friendship/nostalgia.
Also your digipak references the narrative structure of your music video which focuses on memories of carefree friendship. This needs to be emphasised.
Panel 1 referencing the flashback and real time to a return to realtime in the black and white image in Panel 4 thus your digipak references the narrative structure of your music video.
1) Organisation: I'd begin with Panel 1 of the digipak explaining it's coherence with the music video and link each panel (2 & 3 you have explained well ) to Panel 4.
2) Your magazine advert you need to make stronger links between your advertisement, the music video and your digipak.
Follow instructions in blue booklet. Your draft is OK but I think could be stronger if you revise as indicated above. Well done for meeting deadlines, this is much appreciated.
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ReplyDeleteYou need to strengthen the idea of COHERENCE within your whole package. For example visual references; cultural references (representing Norwich and Britishness) friendship/nostalgia.
Also your digipak references the narrative structure of your music video which focuses on memories of carefree friendship. This needs to be emphasised.
Panel 1 referencing the flashback and real time to a return to realtime in the black and white image in Panel 4 thus your digipak references the narrative structure of your music video.
1) Organisation: I'd begin with Panel 1 of the digipak explaining it's coherence with the music video and link each panel (2 & 3 you have explained well ) to Panel 4.
2) Your magazine advert you need to make stronger links between your advertisement, the music video and your digipak.
Follow instructions in blue booklet. Your draft is OK but I think could be stronger if you revise as indicated above. Well done for meeting deadlines, this is much appreciated.